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Andy's mom begins cleaning off Buzz thanking him for giving Andy so much confidence the first time he brought Buzz to "Show and Tell" when Andy started 2nd grade. After she placed him back in Andy's room Buzz knew what he had to do, he had to make it so that Woody would fail to the point that he would need Buzz's help. He called out to Deloris a stuffed animal Pommeranian for help asking her to sway Sid's pet bull terrior dog to strike down Woody's forces! She agreed that when night fell she would approach him and ask for his favor.
That night Deloris approached Scud the bull terrier and laid by his side and said that if he ever had feelings for her he'd stop Woody's forces from saving Jessie and he agreed. That night Woody's forces approached the tree house and Scud had assembled all of Sid's Toys. A brutal battle ensued and Woody's forces were kept at bay with Scud's help. It was then that the Little Green Men were trampled by Sid's toy: Babyface and in their last squeeze they thanked the claw and Buzz saying they were "eternally grateful".
When Woody's forces returned they looked for Buzz everywhere to ask for his help against Sid's toys. When he heard of the Little Green Mens demise he was enraged and went on a spree dismantling all the of Sid's toys one by one. He went running after Babyface the one that squeezed his Little Green Men. He chased Babyface three times around the base of the treehouse when Sid's mom came outside and all the toys went inanimate and she began to clean up placing Buzz and Babyface in the same bin. Thanks to Sid's mom Buzz was close enough to Babyface and dismantled him.
Author's Note:
In the second part Buzz regrets his decision losing his loyal Little Green Men just as Achillies lost Patrolkas. Athena was represented by Sid's mom in this case helping Buzz stop Babyface played by Hector. He ran around the treehousen three times just like Achillies chased Hector around Troy three times. Hope you guys enjoyed.
Hi David!
ReplyDeleteI was interested in your story because of title and the image you chose. The “Andy’s Iliad” part made me chuckle, and I immediately knew that the Toy Story characters were going to be involved. This was a creative take on the Greek classic, and I am amazed at how you were able to relate the characters and their experiences to the original story.
I was sad when the Little Green Men died. I didn’t want anyone on the protagonist team to get hurt, but it did create a good ending to the story.
Were Deloris and Scud’s characters also based off the Iliad, or did you create their part of the story in order to explain the battle?
I was thinking that you could get someone to proofread your next story. There are minor grammar errors, such as missing commas, that could be fixed in order for the next reader to follow the story better.
Hi David,
ReplyDeleteI love this retelling of the Illiad and I think it is so creative. Your idea of making Sid's mom as Athena is so good because like Athena, Sid's mom has so much power over the little toys. Your retelling follows closely to the Illiad. You even added the scene of Achilles chasing Hector around Troy three times.